maura
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Post by maura on Mar 28, 2019 3:30:34 GMT
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Post by saburcat on Mar 28, 2019 19:22:02 GMT
Maura,
So this is like a "perfect" ending to all the things you've written in this workshop. Obviously there are a million and half things I don't know about your family and your relationship with your parents, but near the end of this when you mention that the girl and her mother get along now, it's like the closing of a circle. Not that how you were treated as a child should or could be ignored or forgotten, but just like, as you mention about caring for your 13 year old self in the other piece, you've maybe realized that to heal yourself, you have to forgive or move past what was. I know this isn't a therapy session, but I just couldn't but feel like this piece is a perfect conclusion to the other things you've written about.
You connect the broken plate to the broken girl well, and I loved the line, "the grandmother was overjoyed at having a first grandchild when all of the pieces of the mistake settled." The girl was a mistake, the broken plate was a mistake, and yet both were wonderful gifts in the end. It feels like finding this plate only a few days ago and working together to glue it back together and putting it in a shadowbox is a metaphor for the relationship of the girl and her mother...those broken edges will always be there, but that doesn't mean it can't be repaired.
I think this lines up with your ending and the line, "It is time to create something imperfect and lovely that answers the question “That’s beautiful but looks broken. Where’s it from?” as wholly as possible." We are all broken, and we must find the means to glue ourselves back together, even if the way we do that doesn't make sense to others, or even if there are other ways to repair it.
Louise
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linz
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Post by linz on Mar 29, 2019 16:18:41 GMT
Maura, I've enjoyed all of your pieces; the Smurl one is remarkable because it captures your fear so well.
This piece is my favorite because it has an old fashioned, charming feel to it. Words like Mercury retrograde, marcel wave, triptych, king's blue chiffon, empire waist, shadow box cemented this tone. Your details: shawl in crook of elbow, description of the redhead's eyes on the plate are so effective. I appreciated the analogy between the unplanned broken plate and pregnancy. Chide is a perfect word for a Mom confronting a nurse daughter about a surprise! pregnancy. Like Louise, the sentence about the gramma still overjoyed about the impending child stood out. I also liked the daughter and mother bonding over feeling the same way about being in love with their mates: can't eat, can't sleep, etc. You show the guilt trips your Mom doled out well but I too noted she now seems loving/forgiving toward you. I would love to see the displayed plate.
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