linz
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Post by linz on Mar 18, 2019 17:25:36 GMT
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Post by saburcat on Mar 28, 2019 19:00:40 GMT
Lindsay,
I like how each piece adds details. The first one definitely shows the innocence of the kindergartner in the photo. I can see the cousins standing next to each other, Raggedy Ann and squaw. Also focusing on the teacher shows the child's perspective, as the teacher would have loomed large for the child.
I like in the third section how you go into more details about the Comm. I think if you wanted to work on a piece from this exercise, you could use the Comm as the focus. You could touch on how it was such a large part of your life and the experiences you had there, including the Halloween party. Maybe even look into it's history if you wanted...just a few thoughts.
I also think the story of your uncle is so sad, it's something else you could expand into another essay...maybe how you felt about it, did you worry about your own father, were you close to that uncle (obviously you were close to the cousins), etc. It sounds like it would have been a large event in your life.
Louise
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